Monday, May 12, 2008
Blah, I'm merging the two poems together. There are some nicer stanzas, and some horrible ones in both poems. What do you think of the new one?
Things came by unexpected
A visitor came knocking on our door
It silently announced that you had to leave me
It left me in shock, in pain
It left me wandering in grieve
When the news came pouring from her mouth
The Great Depression was played again
Sad melodies came out of our golden instruments
Sad notes filled the empty score sheets
Our fingers kept on moving to the happy song
But our hearts were bleeding with the loss
Music was the source of our mistake
Though I know you'll never let it
I wished that Music did not mean much
But I'll see you through it
Till Music comes back to us
The new one's... a mixture of the nicer stanzas I suppose. And it's pretty short.
I'm still debating on which one to give to nicolette. Damn
5:30 AM